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| "a lady looking through a telescope while her maidservant holds an umbrella" by Hokusai |
"I shall gaze upon the land,
or maybe upon the sea,
but really anything will do
any thing, other then you"
This she said to me,
as she stared out her glass,
to which a glare is my only atack
my teeth shining black.
She really seems so rude,
insulting me like that,
But it is meant to be,
She is is surely greater than me.
Truth be told, I like it
being lesser, that is,
for had I been she,
I'm sure, everyone would hate me.
this poem really did go well with the painting
ReplyDeleteoooohhh!I love the perspective that you used in the poem!
ReplyDeleteIf i had written a poem off of the same painting, i would have written from the view of the lady looking through the telescope.
i find the poem to be so pretty, its like exacty what would be going through my mind... if i were the "maidservent"
good job with your rhyming, i always apprichate dark poems that rhyme
-ferny
Ben! I really love this poem because of how you wrote it and it kind of sounds like a story which is what I really like about it. Oh, and by the way I used your poem in my blog post this week! Hope you like it!
ReplyDeletethis is the worst poem i have ever written. and just so you know, the maidservant has black teeth, you just cant see it. worst poem ever.
ReplyDeletehaha. that's how i felt about my poem too. lots of people like it, but the person who wrote, hates it...
ReplyDeletei thought your poem wasn't bad at all. great rhythm and a nice way to end it. good job